Draft DPS

Teachers Feed back

 

 

          After looking at my teacher’s feedback on one of my draft contents pages I will consider the changes she suggests for my next drafts and my final contents page. I have a lot of black space on the top of this draft I will try and re arrange this so I don't have so much free space. I need to include the name of my magazine so I  will rearrange and maybe add the name of my magazine here. The photos I added to this contents page don't seem to create continuity throughout my magazine. I will look at the different photos I have took and see which ones link in with my product. The other smaller image I have included doesn't create more continuity throughout my magazine so I think I need to take this image off my magazine. The text on this draft is not very clear and straight forward to read. I need to make it clear which ones are my headlines and smaller text underneath explaining what the article or story is about. I need to separate the sections so they're easy to read i need the reader to be able to easily locate which story goes with each headline and page number. On this draft contents page I’ve only included 23 pages the price i have priced my product I think I need to add more page numbers. I will place all my page numbers down the side next to the story's so they're easy to read. I need to change the page numbers so they're straight forward to need and they all stand out in comparison to the text.

Peer Feed back

 

Strengths: Photos look good and well layed out.

Areas of improvement: Check spelling and proof read it. The CON needs to be more on the page.

Stengths: nice variation of photos, good use of colour.

Areas of improvement: a bit simple? and some of the text doesnt work 'fashion'.

Strengths: I like the variety of pictures and the continuous colour scheme; it shows that it's consistent. I also like the way the colours and outfits work well with your genre.

Areas of improvement: The title could maybe be in a different layout and the pages could be set out a bit more neatly.

Other Comments: Overall, I like the way the colour scheme works with your genre and the variety of different pictures shows what else is in your magazine.